Taking on broad the group crit comments I set about making changes to my editorial. Losing the pink, opening up the layout by getting rid of the lines on the quotes. Im still struggling with the layout of the text boxes, which is Ive moved around so much now that I can’t decide on the best position. Again Ive shy’d away from the type detailing, just wanting to get it handed in and then to make the final edits ready for printing. Still felt that the layout could be more playful, Im struggling to think outside of the box and come up with something that is going to stand out. There was an idea to emboss musical notes on the last page as an interpretation of Anna listening to audio books in her darkened room. I created notes in illustrator and placed them over the last page.
Packaging the final piece was something that I had not come across before. I found that there was lots of messing around with changing the images from RBG to CMYK ready to package properly. Also had trouble with linking the oblique font, which needed to be downloaded again. However it was a positive exercise and something that I would be able to do with no issues for the next digital hand in. Hoping that there won’t be too many changes to be made before I have to print.
It was great to see everybody’s work so far in our presentation of our pieces. Lots of my peers had also chosen A Decade In The Dark text as well, was really interesting to see how it had been interpreted differently by others. There were a few that stood out, especially Allegra’s editorial on modern day slavery. Felt that the pace and overall layout was excellent, with a clever use of a line that ran throughout the piece which brought it all together.
I had some really positive comments on my piece, even though there was mixed reviews on my cut off quotes, it was suggested that I try and make them so that the words are shown in full, to make it more legible. Lots of work to be done on the type detailing, something that I knew was going to be brought up……I had messed around with the layout of the text boxes, trying to get the path for the eye right, that it had been left. To be honest it was not something that I am confident in doing, will have to research into how to do it properly, definitely needs to be done, don’t want an awful rag distracting from the overall layout. The use of the pink was questioned, I could not justify it, other than it was a nice contrasting colour on top of the imagery and blackness of the last page. Will have a play around with some less garish colours.
It was also suggested that I took that lines out of the pulled out quotes, as they felt like they were boxed in, I somewhat liked them, but I will see have they look by being set free.
Overall this group crit was really helpful, plenty of work to be done now to get the final piece finalised.
Having had a one to one with my tutor, it was suggested that perhaps that I was not utilising my space appropriately, so may be not have so large a cut outs within my layout.
I found this one to one really helpful. Ive taken on the constructive criticism, still plenty of work that needs to be done. I have a feeling that it will all be changed. The typeface needs to be changed too, it was said “delete that typeface off your computer” made me chuckle, and have to agree, poor choice. I was pointed in the direction of using Akzidenz Grotesk, I think that it will work really well, plus Helvetic was developed from it and its one of my favourites. The use of Garamond would be a nice contrast, to highlight the quotations.
I think that my piece is going to go off in different direction. I went out and took more photos. Literally pointed the camera at the sun in some of them, they came out surprisingly well I think. They almost make me want to squint just looking at them.
I started to redesign the editorial, I had come across book binding bolts that I wanted to incorporate in the final piece, which would also mean looking at printing on thicker paper or even card. On the final page I had ideas of still using the UV ink, in a pop up box at the end to peep through, but it wasn’t something that I think could final justify as to why it was there.
I set about redesigning in InDesign below is my design process so far………..
This is my design to show for the group crit with my peers.
When designing this I had in mind my Design Boom project, my feedback on this was that the front cover felt different to the contents, so I wanted to make the this editorial flow and have some similarities throughout. The layout I feel is playful, even though I have a few doubts about the quotes cutting off the pages, it will be great to have opinions from my class on this.
In order to come up with an individual design for the editorial of this piece, I need to find my own interpretation of the text. By looking at the plot, setting, point of view. purpose, and content I am able to find my own meaning within to develop a design for the layout.
The writer Ed Caesar writes an account from his own point of view with snippets taken from Anna Lyndsey’s memoir and interview with her. The piece flows well, but the conclusion ends I feel fairly abruptly, leaving any type of purpose for the article hanging. He doesn’t seem to have any feeling towards the Character Anna which are neither objective or subjective – which seems quite odd considering the opening sub-line has reference to doctors opinions.
There are many images that come to mind when reading this piece, such as burning flames, a path to the darkness blinding light. However I want to produce the layout and imagery that it not so literal to the text, something a little abstract.
I decided to break up the text into three parts to fit over the 2 double page spread and a single page at the end. I would like to the text to work with the imagery, so that each section of the text works with different images.
To get some inspiration I googled images that I thought would represent the text.
Im looking forward to taking this piece forward and creating images, as it will enable myself to use the use the skills that I have learnt and developed so far this year.