It was great to see everybody’s work so far in our presentation of our pieces. Lots of my peers had also chosen A Decade In The Dark text as well, was really interesting to see how it had been interpreted differently by others. There were a few that stood out, especially Allegra’s editorial on modern day slavery. Felt that the pace and overall layout was excellent, with a clever use of a line that ran throughout the piece which brought it all together.
I had some really positive comments on my piece, even though there was mixed reviews on my cut off quotes, it was suggested that I try and make them so that the words are shown in full, to make it more legible. Lots of work to be done on the type detailing, something that I knew was going to be brought up……I had messed around with the layout of the text boxes, trying to get the path for the eye right, that it had been left. To be honest it was not something that I am confident in doing, will have to research into how to do it properly, definitely needs to be done, don’t want an awful rag distracting from the overall layout. The use of the pink was questioned, I could not justify it, other than it was a nice contrasting colour on top of the imagery and blackness of the last page. Will have a play around with some less garish colours.
It was also suggested that I took that lines out of the pulled out quotes, as they felt like they were boxed in, I somewhat liked them, but I will see have they look by being set free.
Overall this group crit was really helpful, plenty of work to be done now to get the final piece finalised.